AUTHOR’s EDIT OF POST
I have been educated by a few very generous authors that what I had below were probably tag lines – not complete enough to be log lines. So, here are a few more appropriate log lines to consider while I go do more learnin’. I have numbered them so that I don’t get confused by earlier comments. Am I getting closer to something good?
5. “A vain nobleman finds that the way to his heart is through his wardrobe when a tailor’s daughter is abandoned in his town.”
6. “A vain nobleman discovers that passion lies between the neckline and the hem when a tailor’s daughter is abandoned in his town.”
I need help choosing an effective log line for Vain, book three in my Evolution Series. For those of you who don’t know, a log line is the very, very brief blurb that should catch a potential reader’s attention.
Would any of these would make you look more closely at a book? Would you expect the book to be a historical romance?
1. Love lies somewhere between the neckline and the hem. (I’ve also thought of replacing “love” with “passion”.)
2. The way to this nobleman’s heart is through his wardrobe.
3. Needles and pins, needles and pins, when a man marries his trouble begins. (This is an old nursery rhyme and I considered changing “marries” to “tarries”
4. Medieval metrosexual meets ninth-century haute couture. (I know this one is pretty far out, but I just had to throw it in the ring.)
Okay folks, let me know what you think!